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can i get your opinions on a poem i wrote?

i wrote this poem for all the children that were gone too soon. its the first poem i have written in years. i will post it under this question because its kind of long thank you and please be honest. i can take it.

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Asked by SThompson21 at 9:28 AM on Sep. 19, 2009 in Just for Fun

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  • a beautiful angel
    too soon gone
    she was here on a loan
    but called back home
    a life too short
    nobody knows why
    left behind are her mother and father to cry
    it doesnt make sense and there is no reason
    why this beautiful angel was called back to heaven.
    so many lives she touched
    so many hearts are broke
    because in our hearts, we all held hope.
    but she went home to the Father above, where she will forever be surrounded by love
    she is now running and playing, laughing and smiling
    no more hurt and no more crying
    mom and dad are here to wait, until the day they can see her face.
    until that day, she will be around
    and up in heaven smiling down
    so think of her often and remember when
    until the day you are together again

    Answer by SThompson21 at 9:29 AM on Sep. 19, 2009

  • This makes me so sad. A beautiful poem. I am sorry for your pain.

    Answer by DesertDance at 9:43 AM on Sep. 19, 2009

  • ITs beautiful and very sad. I hope it helps you move on!!

    Answer by elananme at 9:48 AM on Sep. 19, 2009

  • i have not a lost a child but every day mothers do lose their babys. this is for them. thanks so much ladies :)

    Answer by SThompson21 at 9:50 AM on Sep. 19, 2009

  • my husband and i lost our son five months ago, this is a really nice poem

    Answer by devo3 at 9:53 AM on Sep. 19, 2009

  • pretti poem... do u have more??

    Answer by Linsigirl26 at 10:57 AM on Sep. 19, 2009

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