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Another poem that i have! what you think?

Where were you?
When my mom used to beat me?
Where were you ?
When I need someone to love me?
Since you gone
There is not much hope
Broken hear, big scars
Things that will never stop
My life is not the same
Cause I died the same day you died
Please help me try
I don’t want to do same mistake she did
I don’t want to became the women she is
I want to be different
But being like you
And do what I want to
There is no word you can tell me mom!
Forgiveness is something that won’t happen
Past is past
What the present is what I live
Future is something you never but me in
So why forgiveness ?
When you need me
I reject you
Now I need you
you’re rejecting me
so we will play this role forever?
What kind of gradma you want to be?
The one that treat than like shit?
The one that broke my heart?
Because of one mis

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Sofiah

Asked by Sofiah at 10:35 AM on Jul. 22, 2010 in Relationships

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Answers (3)
  • It is a strong poem emotionally but there are many gramatical mistakes. I think poetry is a very helpful emotional outlet, but watch your grammer!
    salexander

    Answer by salexander at 10:41 AM on Jul. 22, 2010

  • It was pretty good But sad !!


    Mom Michelle
    Countrygirl30fl

    Answer by Countrygirl30fl at 10:46 AM on Jul. 22, 2010

  • SALEXANDER
    english is not my first language. lol
    i'm sorry for grammer mistakes
    lol
    Sofiah

    Comment by Sofiah (original poster) at 10:48 AM on Jul. 22, 2010

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