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Just got back into writing poetry, would love some feed back on these 2 poems?

Please tell me your honest opinion of these poems? Thanks!
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#1:

So long to the long, lonely nights.
Where I wished you were by my side.
So long to the warm, secure times
Where you held me closely all night.

This roller coaster seems never resting.
These feelings will not change.
We knew it was love, my dear.
But somehow we let it slip away.

These memories I will hold closely.
And cherish at every chance I get.
And when I am long gone and lonesome.
I will strive to never forget.

I am thankful for everything.
The knowledge I have gained.
The love I thought I could never know..
Has vastly slipped away.

Just out of reach,
Knowing I have stretched myself far beyond my means.
I have always tried, my love.
I have always tried.

 
Anonymous

Asked by Anonymous at 12:06 PM on Nov. 17, 2010 in Just for Fun

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Answers (6)
  • I like them! you rockkeep it up! :)

    kiansmom0423

    Answer by kiansmom0423 at 12:15 PM on Nov. 17, 2010

  • Very nice.
    SweetLuci

    Answer by SweetLuci at 12:42 PM on Nov. 17, 2010

  • Thumbs up!
    Airamana

    Answer by Airamana at 12:48 PM on Nov. 17, 2010

  • #2:


    I remember those days..
    Those days as a child.
    When nothing really mattered..
    Pure happiness, my face plastered with a smile.

    Oh, to be young again.
    With not a care in the world.
    If only that were possible..
    Id be a completely different girl.

    But, I know I will never get the chance.
    & That I must live with my mistakes.
    Even if it costs me that smile..
    Even if it makes me feel fake.

    Bitterness will do me no good.
    As I am sick of feeling that way.
    I will try to hold my head high,
    I will try to make you want to stay.

    The World stands on my shoulders.
    It does not lie, it does not rest.
    The world has brought me to this place..
    & I cannot change what I am, none the less.

    & When I get the chance..
    I sit and I reminisce.
    Happiness at first glance.
    Pain deep within the abyss.
    Anonymous

    Comment by Anonymous (original poster) at 12:06 PM on Nov. 17, 2010

  • Good cadence - keep the creative flow going!
    tasches

    Answer by tasches at 12:58 PM on Nov. 17, 2010

  • I liked them too.
    Shines3

    Answer by Shines3 at 2:10 PM on Nov. 17, 2010