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Rough draft...a poem im working on!

just let me know what u think!!!

WOULD U MISS ME?!?!
I FEEL SO HURT, MY HEART IS BROKEN AFTER EVERYTHING WE'VE
BEEN THROUGH. ALL THE LIES ALL THE HEARTACHE IM STILL HERE..BUT WOULD U MISS ME IF I LEFT JUST DISSAPEARED..NO LETTER NO CALL NO TEXT AT ALL..NO IMAGE OF ME HANGING AROUND..JUST NONE OF ME LEFT MY VOICE MY TOUCH MY EVEYTHING GONE WOULD U MISS ME..I GAVE U MY HEART I GAVE U MY SOUL.. I KNOW IM NOT PERFECT BUT WOULD U MISS ME IF U COULDNT HAVE ME AT ALL..MY HEART WAS FILLED WITH GOOD MEMORIES N HAPPINESS DIDNT THINK ANYTHING COULD TEAR IT AT ALL..THAT NIGHT I HAD TEARS IN MY EYES I COULDNT EVEN SEE THAT U BROKE ME SO BADLY SO HERE I AM I SEE SO CLEARLY NOW. I DONT EVEN THINK U'D MISS ME AT ALL.


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mommyof3_21

Asked by mommyof3_21 at 1:54 PM on Mar. 23, 2011 in Just for Fun

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  • It flows. Just break it up some in few word phrases where you would have a natural pause. And spell out your words. Use spell check.
    CoffeeWriter

    Answer by CoffeeWriter at 4:37 PM on Mar. 23, 2011

  • sounds like the beginnings of a song.
    Camilletnt

    Answer by Camilletnt at 1:55 AM on Mar. 24, 2011

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