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6 Bumps

Pretty good for a 16 year old, right?

This is a poem I wrote for my husband (then my secret fiance), soon after we decided to marry. I was rather impressed with my 16 year old self when I found this lol. It's even truer now than it was then! What do you guys think I should call it?

It seems so very recent, love
That first you said my name.
The first time that I felt your hand
Your kiss to my lips lain.

It's still fresh in my memory
The first spark of your touch.
When first I came to know your eyes
And you became my crutch.

My head still swims with all the time
That I've spent in your arms.
From dusk to dawn, to hell and back
You've kept me safe from harm.

We've both endured the trials now
And we've passed all the tests.
This ring attests to both our hearts
Much truer than the rest.


Asked by Ati_13 at 10:09 AM on Jun. 3, 2011 in Just for Fun

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Answers (3)
  • call it what it was made for..secret fiancee

    Answer by sandraberke at 10:17 AM on Jun. 3, 2011

  • I wrote some poems too at 16, love is so ardent and true and strong at that age! yeah I would say you did pretty good, not too many people can put their emotions on paper like this, why not call it, "True love"

    Answer by older at 10:19 AM on Jun. 3, 2011

  • Dawning of the Spark.. First Spark.. Dawns First Spark.. Love's Spark.. True Spark.. Endless Spark.. Forever Spark..

    all about the spark there and yes is very good... hope those help you decide..

    Answer by girlglow6 at 10:21 AM on Jun. 3, 2011