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My daughter is writing!! ~Chapter One in replies~

Posted by on Jan. 4, 2013 at 1:09 PM
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My daughter has been talking about writing (typing) a fan fiction about Tokyo Mew Mew.  I said well why not put your ideas down on the computer.  She contemplated it a while and finally did it!  She has written three small chapters for it.  I thought I'd share her first paragraph of the first chapter that she has been working on.  My daughter is 11, possibly has dysgraphia, and she just started really getting in to reading this year.


Chapter one:  What's Wrong with Ichigo?

  Ichigo walked in to the cafe, but something was different, instead of getting to work she sat at the table.  "Ichigo, it's time to get to work," Lettuce said.  "Work?"  Ichigo looks around, "I don't work here."  She said.  "Don't you remember?" Lettuce asked. "No," she answered.



I'm wondering what others think of her first time actually writing on her own.  I'm a bit biased, but super excited she is doing something on her own.

I'm trying to get her to work on the detail of the characters and the places things are taking place a bit more.



Tokyo Mew Mew is a manga/anime about girls working in a cafe and save the world. 

by on Jan. 4, 2013 at 1:09 PM
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cjsmom1
by on Jan. 4, 2013 at 1:11 PM

That's great!!!

momnwife41458
by on Jan. 4, 2013 at 1:11 PM
This is really good! :)
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leighp1
by on Jan. 4, 2013 at 1:17 PM

She is off to a great start!!!  I hope to see more of her writings soon.


KrissyKC
by Silver Member on Jan. 4, 2013 at 1:22 PM

awesome!!!


Silverkitty
by Bronze Member on Jan. 4, 2013 at 1:22 PM

I had my daughter read these and she had the biggest smile on her face.  I haven't seen that in a LONG time.

irvinehiker
by Andrea on Jan. 4, 2013 at 1:35 PM

 Love it :)

usmom3
by BJ on Jan. 4, 2013 at 4:08 PM

 It is great to see children doing something like this.

Silverkitty
by Bronze Member on Jan. 15, 2013 at 2:54 PM

Chapter one:  What's Wrong with Ichigo?

  Ichigo walked in to the Café Mew Mew, but something was different, instead of getting to work she sat at the table.  “Ichigo, it’s time to get to work,” said Lettuce. “Work?” Ichigo looks around, “I don’t work here.” She said. “Don’t you remember?” Lettuce asked.  “No,” she answered.

    Ichigo was not like herself today, she usually went to work, except for today. “What’s wrong with Ichigo?” Lettuce whispered to Mint. “I don’t know, Ichigo usually gets strait to work and starts complaining that I’m not working.” Mint answered. ”She has a point” Lettuce said. ”What does that mean?” Mint asked.  “Hey what’s wrong with Ichigo onee-chan?” Pudding asked coming through the door with Zakuro.  “Pudding, Zakuro. We don’t know what’s wrong with her” Lettuce answered.

    Ryou hit her in the back of the head wale waking in with Keiichiro and said. ”Get to work.” “Hey” Ichigo said.  ”Good morning everyone.” Keiichiro said. “Good morning” Lettuce said. “Something’s wrong with Ichigo, she’s not attacking like herself.” Mint expands. ”Really.” Ryou asked. ”Yes, can’t you tell? Even Pudding can tell. ”Lettuces said. 

    After a long day of work, Kisshu flow in.” Where’s Koneko-chan?” Kisshu asked. “You may not want to know, she’s being weird.” Mint said.” What do you mean?” Kisshu asked. ”Why don’t you look for yourself.” Lettuces said. Kisshu looked at Ichigo.” Koneko-chan what’s wrong?” Kisshu asked. ”Who are you?” Ichigo asked. ”Don’t you remember me?” Kisshu asked worried. ”no” Ichigo answered.

    After that Pie and Taruto flow in.” what’s wrong Kisshu?” Tart asked. ”Ichigo doesn’t remember me.” Kisshu said upset. “Why?” Tart asked. “We don’t know” Zakuro said. Pie hummed “Maybe there’s something or someone did this.” Pie said. ”but who” Mint asked. But before anyone could think of a answer. ”There’s a Kirema Tree at main street!” Keiichiro Said. ”What! Did you make it Taruto?” Mint asked. “No” Taruto answered. “Then who did” Ryou asked. 

SusanTheWriter
by Bronze Member on Jan. 15, 2013 at 3:04 PM

That is so cute!! I have to know - what happens next? :)

oredeb
by on Jan. 16, 2013 at 2:02 PM

 fantastic silver!!!!!

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