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[DOVE5397]

I Just Want To Breathe


I want to walk to an empty field.

Lie down and look at the space between me and God.

I want to reach my arms out

and feel him kiss me like I how I use to be able to

because I don't feel that these days.

Instead, I feel the emptiness of the cold air freeze my lungs.

Security holds me like an armless mother with a crying child.

I just want to be held.

I want to be picked up from this Earth that I lie gently inside of

and be cradled inside soft arms

and sway to a heartbeat that's not my own.

Because relying on myself to navigate through the pathways of this giant world

is just too scary to think about.

I will lie to sleep silent under this sky,

breathe slowly,

and hope that God hears each breath I give

but rely on my own sanity to hold me.



-Shawn Franco





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[JanieR]

I think it's beautiful!

[DOVE5397]

I WILL LET HIM KNOW THAT.

[andreamom]

This poem illustrates a need... to be held, and loved.  I can understand this emotional feeling of fear.... of being alone in this world.  I think we all want to feel a sense of security and love.  This poem has great emotional expression.  I liked it.  Thanks for sharing.