If You Forget Me

[haskins20amber]

(This was something I wrote after my Grandpa passed away back in 2007)


I may be gone but not for long.
So if you forget me look in you heart,
That's where I'll be.

I maybe gone but not for long.
If you forget me go get your tedy bear,
That's where I'll be.


I maybe gone but not for long.
If you forget me look at my old garden,
That's where I'll be.


I maybe gone but not for long.
If you forget me look at your husband,
He's the one I sent to keep you safe.
that's where I'll be.

In memory of Robert Snider. My wonderful Grandpa may he rest in peace!

[wvcoffeechick]

very sweet:)

[trapperhoney]

very poignant.

[home4ever]

Aw...you're bringing tears ro my eyes...

[Chalicia]

"(This was something I wrote after my Grandpa pasted away back in 2007)"

Now, I hope I don't offend you or anything, but I read this and almost died laughing.   Don't get me wrong, the poem is very sweet and touching and I'm sorry for the loss of your loved one, but my inner grammar nazi saw this and tickled my funny-bone.  I am sure you meant passed away, but when I read he "pasted away" all I could think of was it must have been a sticky way to go.  I know, I'm morbid and weird, but just thought I'd share.

[haskins20amber]

No its fine I only have my cell so the my spelling is off on something and I guess that I missed it when I re-read it.

[judith106]

Quoting Chalicia:

"(This was something I wrote after my Grandpa pasted away back in 2007)"

Now, I hope I don't offend you or anything, but I read this and almost died laughing.   Don't get me wrong, the poem is very sweet and touching and I'm sorry for the loss of your loved one, but my inner grammar nazi saw this and tickled my funny-bone.  I am sure you meant passed away, but when I read he "pasted away" all I could think of was it must have been a sticky way to go.  I know, I'm morbid and weird, but just thought I'd share.

Wow I'm brand new to this group and may be out of line because this writer did ask for critique but I'm wondering while you were laughing at her heartfelt poem if you found anything you could say positive about it?  I know I can. For instance I very much like the last few lines because it shows the author has beliefs that I can understand.  See I believe her Grandfather would send someone to help care for her if it was within his power and pray its true.  I just think you were quick to rip apart her poem without looking for anything positive.  Again, I know she wanted a critique but when it comes to a poem about loss I think there should be something positive to say about words from the heart....Just a thought

[haskins20amber]

Thanks what's kinda messed up is I had forgot I had posted this and when I looked at the time and date on when I put the post up was when my grandmother past away also. She was my grandfathers wifw that I has wrote the poem for. Its crazy how things come back around.