So I am taking a intro to communication class this summer and I am trying to write a speech. Just doing the outline for now but my thesis statement...is ....well...I think it needs help. I had a really hard time coming up with a topic to begin with. :-(
I am writing an informative speech about how to find quality health care.
Here's the thesis...
The most important steps in finding quality health care are asking questions, researching, and trusting one's intuition.
Does that seem weak to you? Seems really weak to me. How can I tweak it? Suggestions?
I am not a teacher or an English major but it was my strongest subject in school.
I don't see how you can build a strong enough point with the intuition portion. I also wouldn't end with your weakest point.
I see what you mean. I couldn't think of how else to phrase it. I guess what I want to say is its important to have a provider the makes you feel comfortable. Like sometimes having a provider that you don't like from the start is a sign that its not going to work out. If I don't use that point I need another point to add and that's kinda where I get lost.
Quoting notjstanothrmom:
I am not a teacher or an English major but it was my strongest subject in school.
I don't see how you can build a strong enough point with the intuition portion. I also wouldn't end with your weakest point.
Its very bland. :-(
Quoting allycally:
Its a little bland but i think its passable
The most important rules to finding quality healthcare are trusting your instincts, doing your own research, and asking appropriate questions.
How does that sound? I think trusting instincts is a good point, but definitely a starter point. I would talk about setting up a consult in the questions part. Or maybe make consultation a point and add questions into it.
The most important rules to finding quality healthcare are trusting your instincts, doing your own research, and consulting doctors prior to starting care.
Quoting -PB:I see what you mean. I couldn't think of how else to phrase it. I guess what I want to say is its important to have a provider the makes you feel comfortable. Like sometimes having a provider that you don't like from the start is a sign that its not going to work out. If I don't use that point I need another point to add and that's kinda where I get lost.
Quoting notjstanothrmom:
I am not a teacher or an English major but it was my strongest subject in school.
I don't see how you can build a strong enough point with the intuition portion. I also wouldn't end with your weakest point.
That sounds much better! Thank you so much!
Quoting notjstanothrmom:
The most important rules to finding quality healthcare are trusting your instincts, doing your own research, and asking appropriate questions.
How does that sound? I think trusting instincts is a good point, but definitely a starter point. I would talk about setting up a consult in the questions part. Or maybe make consultation a point and add questions into it.
The most important rules to finding quality healthcare are trusting your instincts, doing your own research, and consulting doctors prior to starting care.
Quoting -PB:
I see what you mean. I couldn't think of how else to phrase it. I guess what I want to say is its important to have a provider the makes you feel comfortable. Like sometimes having a provider that you don't like from the start is a sign that its not going to work out. If I don't use that point I need another point to add and that's kinda where I get lost.
Quoting notjstanothrmom:
I am not a teacher or an English major but it was my strongest subject in school.
I don't see how you can build a strong enough point with the intuition portion. I also wouldn't end with your weakest point.
Growth spurt?
- -PB
on Jun. 29, 2012 at 5:04 PM